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Aight yo i tried to rap, but i miserably failed O.o I hope you enjoy poetry because im in a poetic mood, so here goes! (FEEDBACK) Inside the darkness, is where i reside, and held up on display, upon being locked in time. Its as if what i do, it to never succeed,and every single scar just continuosly bleeds, And upon my pain, it just seems to add, nothing i can do but accept the pain i have. And hopes of one day, a light will break the scars, and forever hold peace, inside my world so dark. But as for now, ill lie here and wait, hoping and praying my pattern will soon break.. and although i pray,to me its still a waste, because if there was a savior, then shouldnt i already be saved? Or possibly im in hell, but i see no flames around, so i take it as God, is all miracled out. So there goes my hope of darkness being broke, ill cry one last time as i slowly slice my throat... Like? (Just made this up too v.v)
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Yeah it's pretty good
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-Undo wrote Yeah it's pretty good

Thanks dude xDD im not even that damned depressed i just like morbid poetry O_O xDD
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Screamo600 wrote Aight yo i tried to rap, but i miserably failed O.o I hope you enjoy poetry because im in a poetic mood, so here goes! (FEEDBACK) Inside the darkness, is where i reside, and held up on display, upon being locked in time. Its as if what i do, it to never succeed,and every single scar just continuosly bleeds, And upon my pain, it just seems to add, nothing i can do but accept the pain i have. And hopes of one day, a light will break the scars, and forever hold peace, inside my world so dark. But as for now, ill lie here and wait, hoping and praying my pattern will soon break.. and although i pray,to me its still a waste, because if there was a savior, then shouldnt i already be saved? Or possibly im in hell, but i see no flames around, so i take it as God, is all miracled out. So there goes my hope of darkness being broke, ill cry one last time as i slowly slice my throat... Like? (Just made this up too v.v)


seems a little dark.why not put it in stanzas?
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Screamo600 wrote Aight yo i tried to rap, but i miserably failed O.o I hope you enjoy poetry because im in a poetic mood, so here goes! (FEEDBACK) Inside the darkness, is where i reside, and held up on display, upon being locked in time. Its as if what i do, it to never succeed,and every single scar just continuosly bleeds, And upon my pain, it just seems to add, nothing i can do but accept the pain i have. And hopes of one day, a light will break the scars, and forever hold peace, inside my world so dark. But as for now, ill lie here and wait, hoping and praying my pattern will soon break.. and although i pray,to me its still a waste, because if there was a savior, then shouldnt i already be saved? Or possibly im in hell, but i see no flames around, so i take it as God, is all miracled out. So there goes my hope of darkness being broke, ill cry one last time as i slowly slice my throat... Like? (Just made this up too v.v)


seems a little dark.why not put it in stanzas?

Hmmmm idk many many people have asked me that,, to much work maybe? Imma lazy stoner with a creative mind v.v **** a stanza xDDD
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