-ANBU wrote Im here to give you sum tips.

1. Need to add more quotation marks.

2.A wee bit of speech tags.

3. Write a whole chapter before posting here.

4.Put some more action into it.

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Pod wrote

I started to right this book a couple of minuets ago. This is what I got so far. Tell me if its good and griping ( makes you want to keep reading ). Also I have not spell checked it yet. So no hate please. This is my first book and im extreamly bored. Please leave feedback. I will rep 100

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"Choose a door" a voice said impatiently. This is it, the final stage. After all six stages this is the end. Relief fills my thoughts, But the man continues. " Behind one door lies life, behind the other lies death. Choose wisely. You have sixty seconds." And with that the voice is gone. The sound of footsteps walking away fill my ears. The the clock begins. Tick. Tick. Tick. Choose wisely I thought. In front of me lies two rusty old metallic looking doors. Around me is nothing but darkness and a bright light. Bright enough to make me turn away. Must be the Bargains I thought. The clock is ticking. I must make my decision quickly. My body still soar and stiff from the previous stages I slowly walk forward. A million different images flashing through my mind right now. I walk until I am nearly nose to nose with the rusty door. On each of the doors labels A and B are on the center of the door along with the logo of the Bargains painted in thick coat of red paint which seems to have a strong salty smell to it. Blood. I take one last look at the bright light which make me squint. With the smell of death in the air. Tick. Tick. Tick. I take a step toward door with the label A. I place my hand out to the handle of the freezing cold door. I push the door with the last of my strength and a loud screeching sound follows. With darkness swallowing me, I take one last deep breath and walk into the unknown.