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NavySeaaL
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Ok guys so I need help with some feedback and what I can add to it for the 3rd verse.

I am trying to make a love song for someone I know but its harder than I thought.

- Thank You

Verse:
I start my day, with you on my mind,
My love for you, is stuck on rewind,
If I dont keep trying, then I will never know,
If Im with you then, I will never let you go (x2)
Oooooo Oooooo

Chorus:
Because I think you are beautiful (x2)
Yeeeaaaah!
You are beauuuutitful
Oh

Verse:
I have to try hard to, get close to you,
If I dont try hard enough Ill, never be with you,
My heart is telling me I have to succeed,
Because, you are the one I need.
Oooooo Oooooo

Chorus:
Because I think you are beautiful (x2)
Yeeeaaaah!
You are beauuuutitful.
Oh


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It is pretty good there Romeo
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RWJ wrote It is pretty good there Romeo


Haha thank you. I'm trying to make a love song for some girl I know. I want to show her that I care about here and that I wish someday we'll be together. Hopefully this will work if I can finish it.
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The song sounds pritty awesome dude!
Keep trying, don't give up!

-OfficialUZ
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RWJ wrote It is pretty good there Romeo


Exactly what i was thinking !
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That actually is really good mate, don't give up.
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Conspiracies wrote That actually is really good mate, don't give up.


Thank you very much! It means alot.
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