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First Attempt at Lyrics
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  • Challenger
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This is my first attempt at actually attempting to create my own lyrical verse.
I got the idea from helping(trying to help)Drizze with a few of his lyrics.
I enjoy writting them and I hope that I am decent.
So guys, what do you think of my first attempt at writing a lyrical verse:

I feel that I'm lethal, and cant be equal,
to these rappers who think they deserve a sequel.
I don't understand, why they think what they planed,
has overran, anything that I have put into plan,
because I demand, everything that makes me the man.
Nowadays every rapper thinks they have made,
something from nothing, just because they are paid.
In all reality and actuality they have stayed the same,
in this game, we call on all our pain, to make a lyric that can change the game.
By now you would think that we would have changed,
and you come to find out that we have stayed the same.
I hope to change this game, from being about thugs and guns,
to rap that actually reaches the people, changes their ways,
and makes them not want be the same, and make a change.
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Drizze
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That;s very nice, keep it up. If you neeed any help pm me.
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Thank you Drizze, I hope to try to continue attempting to write every now and then.
If I need any help I'll be sure to go to you,
#4. Posted:
Drizze
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Also, Mix up your rap styles, dont do the generic
Blah blah rock
b;ah blah rock
do something like

Chemical solution to air pollution a revolution of a mental consitiution.
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Ill be sure to take that advice.
Thank you once again!
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