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i tried to rhyme the word 'lyrics'. I'm not sure if it's good but could you tell me what your opinion on it?

'I'm laughing as im writing these lyrics,
'Cos i know when you hear them they'll smack you into a clinic
giving you hysterics, can only read hieroglyphics.
You'll be so **** in the head it'll turn terrific,
now lets be specific, it'll mash your brain and turn it acidic,
leaving you with hearing only atmospherics.'


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That was very well thought out, i like it. Nice.
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Seems like there was a bit of work put into the lyrics, but you really shouldn't try to rhyme the same word more than twice lol
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WSI wrote Seems like there was a bit of work put into the lyrics, but you really shouldn't try to rhyme the same word more than twice lol

I've heard lyrics in other songs with rhyming words more than twice. This is the end of the lyrics rhyming though.
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IMO, words identical to each other (sound wise) kind of make it feel lacking. You don't necessarily need to rhyme every line/sentence.
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I like it, well thought out lyrics, but go for it every second line maybe?
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It's decent, but I feel like it could of been better without the same rhyme over and over.

Some of the words you chose to rhyme seems to be specifically only there for the sole purpose of rhyming as apposed to being the most suitable word.

Just some constructive criticism.
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So what your all saying is that, not all the ending should rhyme?
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