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WYZE
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I wrote this a few years ago. Tell me what you think.


"Sheep Dogs"

Only Certain people can wear the blue
Many do not understand what we do
With a commitment to protect and serve
We work to provide safety you deserve

There are no normal shifts, not nine to five
We stay night and day to keep you alive
Holidays and weekends don't mean a thing
Whatever you may need, give us a ring

We do all we can to help and provide
To make you feel safe and secure inside
Please remember all the things we must do
Next time time you pray, include the men in blue

Day and night we restore and maintain peace
Enforcing the law, WE ARE THE POLICE







I understand some of you may dislike the Police. And that is ok. But please just rate the poem and we can save the rest for later!
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the content is inspired and the message is good I like it

but at parts it doesn't read very smoothly

nice tho gg
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Nice man needs to have a bit more of a flow though
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it rhymes i like rhyming poems.
very good job.
just all little more touch with your flow.
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tortuga wrote [ Register or Signin to view external links. ]


This is plagiarism young man, you get a zero!!
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6LACK wrote
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This is plagiarism young man, you get a zero!!


Like I said, I wrote this like 5 years ago back in high school.. just found it deep in my computer. Remembering back, yeah I did take a little and twist it up, just forgot I did that.
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