Not bad for first try. It's just a basic C4D room. There are some more advanced light rooms that will really make the whole scene look better. Also that black text needs to a different material so it ...

I guess you have a version that is older that R13. I have R13 and all the Mo-graph functions are there. I would just get C4D R13 instead of trying to update an older version with plugins.

If you don't want to render the video again in C4D you could always import it into any video edit program and make the total length 8-10 seconds. That will slow it down and give you time for a nice mu ...