My newest song:

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Hey guys to keep it short me and my friend are starting to put songs up on soundcloud, heres his newest song right below


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Comments, ideas, anything can go here. Thanks!!

This is my first song, I know it wasn't that good but I needed to make this.
It will be really awesome if i could get some constructive criticism.

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my new track JUSTICE

dm818 wrote This is my first song, I know it wasn't that good but I needed to make this.
It will be really awesome if i could get some constructive criticism.

some of my constructive criticism.

ok first of all the "ya" at the beginning was kinda pointless i think it would sound better just starting off with "I".

"Most times when i'm depressed as f**k" doesn't really sound that great where it is i think it would sound better with a softer ending but the opening wasn't bad.

also you need to work on enunciating your words.

"my highs get lower and my lows get lower" i kinda like that line but as a chorus not so much

"i look into the sky and wonder when ill f**king die i'm a f**king B**ch" this line started out strong and ended off weak.

"never even had many friends" that line sounded funny i think it has to do with they way you said "Kiss"

"dying is easy living is hard" I like that line nuff said

and now we come to the end. you didn't say anything from 2:31 to 3:09 i think that is way to much time to end a song on


overall i would rate it 6/10 there were some lines that were weak, enunciating words is key in good hip hop to me at least. also i would have liked it more if there was more of a "story" to go with it.


Keep practicing

I really hope you enjoy!

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just sum of my best work in my opinion... here is my soundcloud if you wanna listen to some of my other tracks [ Register or Signin to view external links. ]

Here's my youtube channel, on my mobile so can't work out how to add the video's..

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Here's on of my better known singles
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Let me know what you think, constructive criticism is alway welcome.