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If you are a songwriter or even just a person that decided to sit down and write lyrics regardless of the genre or style post them on this thread(at full disclosure of the TTG rules and regulations)
Then users can discuss and give potential ideas to your work
along with some CONSTRUCTIVE criticism.
Any form of lyric based work is accepted only if it does not conflict with the thread rules below.
Raps
Heavy songs
Poems
Haikus
Spoken word
Love songs
Thread Rules:
Then users can discuss and give potential ideas to your work
along with some CONSTRUCTIVE criticism.
Any form of lyric based work is accepted only if it does not conflict with the thread rules below.
Raps
Heavy songs
Poems
Haikus
Spoken word
Love songs
Thread Rules:
- 1. Original lyrics ONLY. Post only your own work.
2. Absolutely NO talking down to a user due to the lyrics he/she posted.
3. Keep profanity to a minimum.(we are still under full extent of the TTG rules)
4. Try to refrain from posting any potentially offensive material(religious, discriminative, political)
5. Depending on how you feel about a certain post, give it a thumbs up or down. Simple
6. Have thoughts or ideas to a users existing lyrics? Quote them and then write your opinion
My lyrics:
Being the author of this thread i will be the first to post my original lyrics.
I am nearly finished with this song and have filed and was granted a copywrite for what you see here.
All property of Kalani Berrios
This is a faster paced song. Could even be considered rap. All about a woman I gave my life too
and she didn't deserve it. I had given up a lot for this person and this is how I feel about it
Blinded By Chance
Being the author of this thread i will be the first to post my original lyrics.
I am nearly finished with this song and have filed and was granted a copywrite for what you see here.
All property of Kalani Berrios
This is a faster paced song. Could even be considered rap. All about a woman I gave my life too
and she didn't deserve it. I had given up a lot for this person and this is how I feel about it
Blinded By Chance
ive given everything i could
but still youve taken so much from me
i was blinded by a vision
of a life that appealed to me
im not one for remorse
but when i look at what youve done
id say our life has run its course
and i soon will be gone
i wont look back once at this curse
i hope you find yourself
cas i promise youll regret
a feeling so relentless
you will never expect
the thought of whats transpired
and a feeling of malcontent
i loved you more than anything
what we had just slipped away from me
the sad part is that i was the one that couldve given you everything
once the most important in my eyes
makes my escape so hard to devise
every time im close im forced to revise
despite the hollow shell
from which this arised
derived from the depths
of my scripted demise
always the one to care yet cast aside
now im looking in from the outside
in the cold without a soul to console
the impulse to convulse in a sense
ill revolt and repulse the urge to come back to this trap ill retract the thoughts
and adapt then elapse the version of myself that wasnt intact
but still youve taken so much from me
i was blinded by a vision
of a life that appealed to me
im not one for remorse
but when i look at what youve done
id say our life has run its course
and i soon will be gone
i wont look back once at this curse
i hope you find yourself
cas i promise youll regret
a feeling so relentless
you will never expect
the thought of whats transpired
and a feeling of malcontent
i loved you more than anything
what we had just slipped away from me
the sad part is that i was the one that couldve given you everything
once the most important in my eyes
makes my escape so hard to devise
every time im close im forced to revise
despite the hollow shell
from which this arised
derived from the depths
of my scripted demise
always the one to care yet cast aside
now im looking in from the outside
in the cold without a soul to console
the impulse to convulse in a sense
ill revolt and repulse the urge to come back to this trap ill retract the thoughts
and adapt then elapse the version of myself that wasnt intact
Comments? Suggestions? Ideas? Post below
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Being the author of this thread i will be the first to post my original lyrics.
I am nearly finished with this song and have filed and was granted a copywrite for what you see here.
All property of Kalani Berrios
This is an acoustic song. Starts a bit dark but gets progressively positive the closer you get to the end
A metaphor for anything you have to work and giver your all for. No matter how difficult.
Enjoy
My Perilous Journey
As the white moon
transcends into the sky.
dancing in between the parted clouds
"will i make it through this?"
i wonder out aloud
this road that i walk
seems to have no end
honestly i cant even recall
where it began
when i reach my destination
how ever long that may take
will be worth every one
of my past mistakes
no road signs
no glowing headlights
from passing cars
i havent seen another person
for far too long
no one could predict
that id ever get this far
the chill of the night upon my bones
in search of a place to call my own
trying to keep my head held high
in this cold wonderland gone awry.
I am nearly finished with this song and have filed and was granted a copywrite for what you see here.
All property of Kalani Berrios
This is an acoustic song. Starts a bit dark but gets progressively positive the closer you get to the end
A metaphor for anything you have to work and giver your all for. No matter how difficult.
Enjoy
My Perilous Journey
As the white moon
transcends into the sky.
dancing in between the parted clouds
"will i make it through this?"
i wonder out aloud
this road that i walk
seems to have no end
honestly i cant even recall
where it began
when i reach my destination
how ever long that may take
will be worth every one
of my past mistakes
no road signs
no glowing headlights
from passing cars
i havent seen another person
for far too long
no one could predict
that id ever get this far
the chill of the night upon my bones
in search of a place to call my own
trying to keep my head held high
in this cold wonderland gone awry.
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-Lyrical- wrote Being the author of this thread i will be the first to post my original lyrics.
I am nearly finished with this song and have filed and was granted a copywrite for what you see here.
All property of Kalani Berrios
This is an acoustic song. Starts a bit dark but gets progressively positive the closer you get to the end
A metaphor for anything you have to work and giver your all for. No matter how difficult.
Enjoy
My Perilous Journey
As the white moon
transcends into the sky.
dancing in between the parted clouds
"will i make it through this?"
i wonder out aloud
this road that i walk
seems to have no end
honestly i cant even recall
where it began
when i reach my destination
how ever long that may take
will be worth every one
of my past mistakes
no road signs
no glowing headlights
from passing cars
i havent seen another person
for far too long
no one could predict
that id ever get this far
the chill of the night upon my bones
in search of a place to call my own
trying to keep my head held high
in this cold wonderland gone awry.
That is actually well done.
Good job.
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That is greatly appreciated man.
Again, its not finished just yet.
I have the melodies and harmonies done just not all of the lyrics
Again, its not finished just yet.
I have the melodies and harmonies done just not all of the lyrics
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-Lyrical- wrote That is greatly appreciated man.
Again, its not finished just yet.
I have the melodies and harmonies done just not all of the lyrics
Aaah nice, again well done.
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*Updated*
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New thread rules
My original lyrics
Music types
Added:
New thread rules
My original lyrics
Music types
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I really like the lyrics you guys have done. I am not very musical. Good job
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Dior wrote I really like the lyrics you guys have done. I am not very musical. Good job
Thank you man!
Means a lot!
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This is a very cool thread, gives a chance for some users to show what they have written.
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Relate wrote This is a very cool thread, gives a chance for some users to show what they have written.
Thanks bro.
Im just waiting to see if other users will post their lyrics
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