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New verse, opinions
I'll do what I can to get noticed
not for the money but to get the
attention i deserve for the lyrics
I write your name in my ink
you spittin pink blood in a sink
But that's your kink why you complainin
while drizze is maning and gettin done for assault,
but they say it's my fault (Pffft...)
last time you seen a lyricist as sick
as this must of been when infinite came out,
Shady stormed into the game had the world by a string
he was the king at the time, still a king in his prime
but it's time to step aside no disrespect but feeble emcees get wrecked.
I'm not cocky but I know my potentiol eminem was influential
But I just wanna see the day me and zep
fill a stadium up and we blow up We'll shut up anyone
who said we shouldn't or couldn't (F*ckers...)
This is about as real as it gets,
No lies or no threats, rap is
a tightrope with no net,
You either make it or don't but you don't dare
say that we wont, any amount of time
I have free I'll work on an ep
make cd's throw em out for free
and see what happens next, but remember,
I'm a born threat.
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I'll do what I can to get noticed
not for the money but to get the
attention i deserve for the lyrics
I write your name in my ink
you spittin pink blood in a sink
But that's your kink why you complainin
while drizze is maning and gettin done for assault,
but they say it's my fault (Pffft...)
last time you seen a lyricist as sick
as this must of been when infinite came out,
Shady stormed into the game had the world by a string
he was the king at the time, still a king in his prime
but it's time to step aside no disrespect but feeble emcees get wrecked.
I'm not cocky but I know my potentiol eminem was influential
But I just wanna see the day me and zep
fill a stadium up and we blow up We'll shut up anyone
who said we shouldn't or couldn't (F*ckers...)
This is about as real as it gets,
No lies or no threats, rap is
a tightrope with no net,
You either make it or don't but you don't dare
say that we wont, any amount of time
I have free I'll work on an ep
make cd's throw em out for free
and see what happens next, but remember,
I'm a born threat.
Last edited by Drizze ; edited 1 time in total
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Every verse you put up is dope af
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It's sick, but I feel like more is needed. The last line leaves me feeling empty, somewhat confused.
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Daklip wrote It's sick, but I feel like more is needed. The last line leaves me feeling empty, somewhat confused.There is actually more i forgot ill add it now
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Dyrdek wrote Every verse you put up is dope afThanks man it means alot, it does.
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This is sick man! Keep up the good work
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Try maybe giving an instrumental or something to help with the flow.
Maybe try giving a bit longer sentences.
Maybe try giving a bit longer sentences.
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HogRider wrote This is sick man! Keep up the good workThanks man it really
does mean alot
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Good effort on that verse,like Soaap said an instrumental should help to get the flow better.
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