While Inkz put it pretty bluntly, I do agree with him. There are a couple of things that you could definitely improve on.

As far as the video aspects of the speed art go, speed arts are pretty much always sped up to match the length of a song, and if it is not sped up by at least 2-3 times I would recommend recording a longer piece.

As far as the piece goes, its a fairly nice idea that used masks pretty well (although, to me it looks like there are quite a few redundant steps/layers in there). I don't think the glow around the logo was a particularly good idea either, I (and a good number of others) think glow should be close to never used, its one of those things like animation where it makes it look almost tacky. It wasn't quite that bad in yours though.

I HIGHLY recommend getting some new resources though, the cut of the render was, to be blunt, pretty awful. You can find a lot of high quality renders from Planet Renders or usually just from a couple of google searches.

Otherwise, the piece could do with a little more "flare", some stocks put on some different blending options would add a lot to an otherwise logo on unedited stocks.