Any feedback or opinions on this would be great

I figure you're new to the whole YouTube craze. Well, commentating is a tough job and requires confidence, enjoyment and fluid English to succeed. You'll improve over time, but I thought I'd make a list of all the cons.

Cons:
- No intro
- You put music in the background which should really have commentary instead.
- You sound a little demotivated and in-confidence; whether or not your parents are home you have to pursue your dreams'.
- As it sounds like you're not enjoying making the video, any viewers wouldn't probably watch it as it'll make them not enjoy it.

Inkzzz wrote I figure you're new to the whole YouTube craze. Well, commentating is a tough job and requires confidence, enjoyment and fluid English to succeed. You'll improve over time, but I thought I'd make a list of all the cons.

Cons:
- No intro
- You put music in the background which should really have commentary instead.
- You sound a little demotivated and in-confidence; whether or not your parents are home you have to pursue your dreams'.
- As it sounds like you're not enjoying making the video, any viewers wouldn't probably watch it as it'll make them not enjoy it.

Thanks for the feedback