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Olivia- wrote Rap isent my cup of tea.

I will say though that I somewhat like the beat of the song but I don't understand the lyrics and the meaning of the song.

But if you keep practicing over time I could see your music being a big hit.


Thank you for your feedback, the song was just me being ignorant and having fun on the track. I found the beat, wrote the verse and recorded it in 45 mins but it was fun to make lol. Hopefully something I make in the future catches your eye, again, thank you for your ear.
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josiah wrote I like the quality of the song, your flow on the song FOR ME is too slow, ME personally I like melodic music for example Finer Things from Polo G.

For your first song it's really really better than most people who are just starting out.

I also think you'll need a good hook.. you just did one flat verse. In my opinion if you had a nice hook and maybe 2 verses it would be a banger


Totally understand, I just go for a more chiller vibe but I should try to speed it up once in a while. Like I said to Oliver up above, I made it in a short period of time, but there's more beat so it always possible for me to add more to it if I wanted to. Lol, thank you for your advice and your ear, I really do appreciate it truly.
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vibing wrote
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vibing wrote 4/10


Well hopefully I make something better and you can give me a better rating. Would love to hear some feedback to figure out what to get better at..



I fukz wit the lyrics, but I honestly don't like your flow maybe bcuz I listen to lil baby a lot nd he has such a different flow in every song, you aren't bad I didn't rate you 4/10 I rated the song homie, don't give up


Understand completely, I feel more comfortable rapping slower but I should break out of that and see what I can do. I'm just glad someone else kinda **** with it that I dont know lol. I wont give up, just got to keep getting better and better and hope for the best.
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ASAPcommander wrote
Olivia- wrote Rap isent my cup of tea.

I will say though that I somewhat like the beat of the song but I don't understand the lyrics and the meaning of the song.

But if you keep practicing over time I could see your music being a big hit.


Thank you for your feedback, the song was just me being ignorant and having fun on the track. I found the beat, wrote the verse and recorded it in 45 mins but it was fun to make lol. Hopefully something I make in the future catches your eye, again, thank you for your ear.

No problem and I look forward to your next song.

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josiah wrote I like the quality of the song, your flow on the song FOR ME is too slow, ME personally I like melodic music for example Finer Things from Polo G.

For your first song it's really really better than most people who are just starting out.

I also think you'll need a good hook.. you just did one flat verse. In my opinion if you had a nice hook and maybe 2 verses it would be a banger

Yeah this right here, something catchy make people want to bang ur shit with you.
7/10
Keep us the good work.
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josiah wrote I like the quality of the song, your flow on the song FOR ME is too slow, ME personally I like melodic music for example Finer Things from Polo G.

For your first song it's really really better than most people who are just starting out.

I also think you'll need a good hook.. you just did one flat verse. In my opinion if you had a nice hook and maybe 2 verses it would be a banger

Yeah this right here, something catchy make people want to bang ur shit with you.
7/10
Keep us the good work.


Thank you for the feedback and the rating, I'm glad you mess with it and bang it. More on the way..
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In my personal opinion it's not a terrible overall first attempt, although there is definitely room for improvement. Try to work on the mixing of the track, your tone of voice, and making your lyrics more digestible to the general public (relatable). Unfortunately it seems like the standout from the track to me is the beat, when you want yourself to be the focal point. Besides that, I'd say you've got a fair starting point for new school rap and you should keep at it.
5/10
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You know what i like this track the start of it kinda took me back when i was younger this type of beat always fire !
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