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Okay so, my English class is reading "The Sun Also Rises" and we have to write a poem about Brett and what describes her personality. This took me a solid 5 minutes to come up with.
Lonely and drunk,
her life really stunk
when Jake went off to bed.
The alcohol in her
made her a sinner
and didnt think using her head.
Willing to learn
was not her concern
when all she wanted was love.
She says she loves jake
but she is actually fake;
she needs help from above.
This is a scene in Chapter 7.
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Lonely and drunk,
her life really stunk
when Jake went off to bed.
The alcohol in her
made her a sinner
and didnt think using her head.
Willing to learn
was not her concern
when all she wanted was love.
She says she loves jake
but she is actually fake;
she needs help from above.
This is a scene in Chapter 7.
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Haha i never read this but this seems like a good poem
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7.5/10 i can say, add some lines
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Sounds good. Flows well in most places. I think you'll do well
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I'm not trying to be Shakespeare, I am trying to get a grade.
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Never read the book, but reading that poem I can tell that it flows well.
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Not bad, i would maybe add some more lines into it to make it a little longer.
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Once again, I am not writing a book. Just a short poem for a grade.
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I have never read the book. The poem sounds good though.
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I reckon it would pass. Not that bad.
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